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Post by tierneyisling on Jan 25, 2011 10:18:42 GMT -5
Name:Anya Striker Race: Half Ishbalan/ Drachman. Alchemy: a little bit of every thing XD the avatar of alchemy XD Title: The Fallen Angel Alchemist SPECIAL POWERS! SHE HAS WINGS! thats because she's half GOD. Um......Part of the amestrian Army...aka CENTRAL COMAND! um surrogant father is ROY MUSTANG! um love interest LING YAO! yays. BIO. After her mom was killed by kimbly during the civil war Anya runs in a hurry to escape the same fate. she then accidently runs into a certain trio of soliders- Roy Mustang, Risa Hawkeye, and Maes Hughes. They are not sure what she is-due to the fact that she has pale skin and auburn hair (but she does have red eyes soooo) they take her in and smuggle her to safety! yay! then roy tak her in and teaches her alchemy. AND! she can fly. because she has wings. ....YAY!!!
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Post by naokoelric2250 on Feb 2, 2011 16:42:58 GMT -5
What a Mary-Sue. Is this a genuine character, or some joke character you made up for a few laughs? If she is a true character, then I am shocked that someone could come up with something this ridiculous and sue-ish. First of all, SHE HAS WINGS?! No-one in “Fullmetal Alchemist” has wings. The only way a character could have wings would be they were infused with some kind of winged animal like a bird or a bat, which is what one of my OCs is infused with. Hiwever, unlike yours, she keeps them hidden under a cloak most of the time. Do you not think that people would find it strange to see a girl with wings running around? Urg. And the alchemy, that is a huge Mary-sue trait, no alchemist, not even Edward Elric, could do all alchemy. Next, SHE IS HALF GOD?! WHAT THE FUCK? That is…that is…just…retardd and a MASSIVE Mary-Sue trait. On to the story. It is just…stupid. First you have no explanation about her early life, and just start of with “oh, her mum got killed by Kimblee!”, which quite Sue-ish. What about her father? And I hardly think Roy, Riza and Hughes would help some random girl escape when they preoccupied with fighting in a war! Also, Roy would adopt a child, surrogate or not). Finally, you need to work on your grammar and sentence structure. The little “yays”, random capitalising of words amd emoticons throughout the profile make it diffcult and annoying to read and looks unprofessional. It is also a tait of Sue-Authors. Please, either fix this OC or remove her.
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Post by Kuri-Kara on Feb 7, 2011 23:41:13 GMT -5
THANK YOU for saying what I kept feeling like saying Naoko. >< This character is SO MARY SUE it's UNBELIEVABLE.
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Post by naokoelric2250 on Feb 10, 2011 3:47:13 GMT -5
You are welcome ^_^.
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